Zombie - night portrait critique

[CodyJefferies]

Hey all,
I am brand new into the world of being behind the lens. I have been a makeup artist for a few years and have been wanting to take to photography to capture my work. Here is a Zombie look I did for Halloween for a client. The environment in my front-yard is amazing for spooky effects, so I setup out there amongst old oak trees covered with Spanish moss. I set up three lights: an umbrella aimed into the trees, a large softbox in front of my client, and a small softbox on a boom for separation. I feel confident about this shot. The one thing I would do different is frame a bit differently to not catch that guide wire in the shot. I really want to grow as a photographer, so any critique given would be awesome! thanks in advance!
Cody



Canon Rebel T1i
shooting mode: manual
shutter speed: 1/125
av: 5.6
ISO: 200
focal length: 41 mm
external flash

the rest of the photos can be seen here:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/codyjefferies/4066617865

[windrider86]

Great makeup job!
I would totally crop this down so that great face fills the frame and gets rid of that wire!
If you are comfortable with post processing I might also be inclined to redden the eyes, darken it up a hair and boost your contrast a bit

[zona5101]

i like the concept of the trees as background elements adding depth and perhaps a bit of spookiness. Unfortunatitly you can't see them so as WR points out, crop it tighter. On a future attemt, go ahead and light those trees, maybe not use the umbrella, go ahead let the light be harsher, contrasty. You might try different positions for the tree light as well such as directly behind the subject pointing into the trees and behind the trees pointing back at the camera. Great makeup.