How about this one

[metoo]

How's this one? This was using some natural light coming in from a window (cloudy dark day) and the pop up flash bounced off the ceiling again. My model wasn't feeling well (still wanted to pose though lol), so no critiques on her expressions or pose please. Well, if you really want to you can but keep that in mind lol. Is the lighting ok? The exposure? To noisy? Is the post processing ok? I noticed right away I cut the toes off And there was enough room to frame it better so double oppss.. Is the focus off? Anything else wrong I'm not thinking of? lol


Sicky girl by My1hd, on Flickr

Camera Canon EOS Digital Rebel XS
Exposure 0.006 sec (1/160)
Aperture f/3.5
Focal Length 50 mm
ISO Speed 400
Exposure Bias 0 EV
Flash On, Fired

[wulf]

What were you trying to achieve with the shot?

As far as the details go, you've spotted the toe amputation but look also for the toe which is awkwardly twisted up and the way the "insect's" antenna crowds her eye. Even without those (and with the toes fully shown) it would look a bit odd simply because of the angle she is lying. Particularly with her head slightly down, it feels uncomfortable.

When she feels better, try again, looking at both the details but also experimenting with the overall pose.

Wulf

[metoo]

Well,I was mostly trying to get the lighting and focus right and practicing some set up shots. I have no idea how to pose people. I will try, try, again! lol

[PointNShoot]

Ouch! The edge of a photo is sharp. Watch the toes.

[ssssnake529]

Other than the toe amputation, I like it. Good expression on the model, good exposure, interesting setting. I like the pose.