First time fashion shot

[RAWcop]

This is one of my fashion shots. I used my new Orbis Ring flash (love it). I am looking for comments/critique on the overall picture (i.e.: pose, PP, lighting, etc...) Unfortunately I didn't catch her with all of the bracelets on until after I took the shots. This was kind of a fast shoot before the mall security came to kick us out of the parking lot.



Exposure 0.008 sec (1/125)
Aperture f/8.0
Focal Length 18 mm
ISO Speed 100
Exposure Bias 0 EV
Flash On, Fired


Thanks!

[yulchick]

Im no pro or anything so it looks good to me! but the only thing that bugs me is that one of her hands and a foot is cut off. The other thing is that the picture seems off somehow, I think its the girls pose or the angle you'r shooting at that makes the picture seem a bit tilted to the side.. otherwise thats a beutiful girl, keep shooting her

[RAWcop]

Originally Posted by yulchick

Im no pro or anything so it looks good to me! but the only thing that bugs me is that one of her hands and a foot is cut off. The other thing is that the picture seems off somehow, I think its the girls pose or the angle you'r shooting at that makes the picture seem a bit tilted to the side.. otherwise thats a beutiful girl, keep shooting her

I think since I was shooting with my 18-200, It is distorted due to the wide angle. That is why the elevator doors are not straight and seem off. I noticed her hand cut off also after I took the picture. I might be able to shop the picture to flatten it out and add the missing fingers. I wish I could have stayed there a little bit longer and taken more shots.
Thanks!
Oh, and she is my step-daughter. Most of my practice shoots are with her.

[ElCapitan]

I have been fortunate to work with a few great models that last couple of months. However, I am assisting photography students, so my job is to help them and only take photos when the students are not. It has been great practice, and I know how difficult it can be to get that great shot when you are pressed for time.

I think the photo is a great start, but I'll let you know what I think needs work.

1)Already pointed out is the hand and foot being chopped off. Make sure you get everything in the frame. It is better to be safe and have to crop just a little bit than chop off body parts and not be able to do anything about it.

2) How were you positioned for the shot? Were you stranding straight up, or were you a bit lower? I think the shot could have benefited from you getting lower.

3) The black of her dress blends into the background, as do the shoes. I think you could have lowered your aperture to expose for the background a bit better, but I am not sure what the ambient lighting was like there. A second flash would have been great to lighten the floor and background behind her because as is, the lower half of the image is just way to dark back there.

[BigFuzzy]

Good thing I read all the comments before writing because I agree fully with ElCapitan.
The big thing for me was the darkness of the bottom half and your positioning.. getting lower or higher really changes an image. Try it out.

[sk66]

The biggest thing to me is the overall feel.
This pose is crying to be taken from lower and wider.

[Hill Country Hack]

I agree with Bigfuzzy and Elcapitan. If this shoot was to sell the skirt and shoes, then they are way too dark.

[RAWcop]

Ok, So I have been doing a few hours of PP with this picture. Let me know what you all think of it now

[Niresangwa]

One thing to bear i mind when using the Orbis is that it's a pretty small light surce, and not overly powerful. It's hard to get the really unique effects from using it unless you're closer than you appear to be in this shot...

Secondly, I'm not a fan of the pose. It has that "I'm doing the walk of shame after a big night out and I"m in need of a garbage can to throw up in" look to it...

the PP'd version is better, but again, to make this work (aside from a more flattering pose) you really needed to get a rim light in that elevator car... i do like the vibrance you brought out in the walls of the lift however.

[fais54]

The new edit looks better, but I agree with not being too crazy about the pose. And for me, I don't like the fact that it's in an elevator. The lighting looks cool; I'll have to check out that Orbis Ring Flash.