First critique

[BigMac65]

I am tough so call it like you see it.......was taken during my first studio workshop .....



D90
aperture 5.3
ISO 800
ex 1/125
strobe with beauty dish I think...

[rward78]

I personally like it and my eyes are immediately drawn to hers.

[shauncunninghamphoto]

You did a great job, in my opinion.

Pros:-
The angles and asymmetry of the background set the context of the “rule of thirds” composition - a very well composed shot. I love the purple shoulder strap in an otherwise colorless image. The pouting is great and the hair falling away in the opposite direction of her gaze is very complementary to the mood.

Cons:-
Rward78 said that he was immediately drawn to her eyes, which I assume was your intent. The composition helps a lot with this (placed upper mid of the center-third - great placement). Her make up helps too, but the PP you’ve done on her eyes creates the main draw. My only criticism is that you have whitened her eyes a little too much. That could of course be a matter of taste but it adds a sense of plasticity to the image that I believe is unnecessary given how well composed the image is, how perfect the lighting is and and how well-presented the model is overall.

Overall, great job.

[BigMac65]

I actually did no PP on her eyes at all.......just basic RAW tweaks......thats it

[gturner]

Just watch that shadow on the nose, minor detail but important.

[corvus2606]

nice shot, well exposed imo. But tell the model to get rid of those blue contacts, they make her look like a barbie doll. from what i can tell she has hazel eyes underneath them, and hazel eyes photograph beautifully

[gturner]

Originally Posted by corvus2606

nice shot, well exposed imo. But tell the model to get rid of those blue contacts, they make her look like a barbie doll. from what i can tell she has hazel eyes underneath them, and hazel eyes photograph beautifully

LOL - I wondered what was bothering me!!!

[corvus2606]

Originally Posted by gturner

LOL - I wondered what was bothering me!!!

I only spotted them because my partner bought some, and i had to hide them from her so she'd stop wearing them.

[BigFuzzy]

The issues I have with the image are twofold:

The composition and the background.

I feel that there's a lot of useless space to the right that (to me) doesn't add anything to the image. Normally it's a good idea (though it's not a set rule) to have any empty space be in the direction the subject is either looking or moving and I think that would have helped with this image having more space to the left (ie the direction she was looking).

As for the background, i simply don't like it. It's too busy and combined with the composition (above) it draws my eyes. And because it's so busy her hair gets lost in it. I believe the best backgrounds are the cleanest (or most blurry) ones.

Also, and it's not your fault, but I feel the model was trying waaaaaaay too hard to pose.. always makes me laugh, the I'm-modelling-pouty-lips look!

[BigMac65]

I very much appriciate all the feed back...many thanks all!!!