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[skatersmitty526]

This is a shot from the first real "studio" shoot I've done. any critique is welcome.

http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-p1tV4c06Oc...0/DSC_7518.jpg

[lerabu]

Hi!

I like the whole rebellious thing that is going on in the shot There are however a few things that I feel could help the shot. Having only started recently in photography take it with a grain of salt, but here is what I feel:

• The subject looks to have a purple tinge to parts of it looking like the girl's bruised in parts?
• The shot could benefit from a tighter crop around the subject, you have a lot of empty space in the top part of the shot
• Additional light sources would also be nice as there is quite a clear shading from left to right. I suppose the light source is to the left of the photographer?
• A more frontal, diffused light source could be used. Or if not frontal then slightly off to the right of the subject at an angle.

I hope this helped! If you think this is complete nonsense, maybe it is :P I don't know!

[Kyle]

Weird crop, weird lighting, not very sharp.

[sk66]

Originally Posted by lerabu

Hi!

I like the whole rebellious thing that is going on in the shot There are however a few things that I feel could help the shot. Having only started recently in photography take it with a grain of salt, but here is what I feel:

• The subject looks to have a purple tinge to parts of it looking like the girl's bruised in parts?
• The shot could benefit from a tighter crop around the subject, you have a lot of empty space in the top part of the shot
• Additional light sources would also be nice as there is quite a clear shading from left to right. I suppose the light source is to the left of the photographer?
• A more frontal, diffused light source could be used. Or if not frontal then slightly off to the right of the subject at an angle.

I hope this helped! If you think this is complete nonsense, maybe it is :P I don't know!

Nope, right on the mark.

[sk66]

Originally Posted by Kyle

Weird crop, weird lighting, not very sharp.

+1, without the exif I can't really say why, but it looks like your DOF is very shallow and only the can is really in focus.

[BigFuzzy]

First, read the forum rules that'll help us help you. Ie include exif and ask a specific question are the biggies.

The photo looks incredibly posed and not natural.. ie forced.
I don't like that you cropped off part of the can. All of your images from that shoot have, to me, odd feeling and too tight crops.

I simply don't find many "shot on white background" images too exciting. It's glaring white.. it takes away from the image in my opinion.

The big thing for me, in this image, is focus. The focus is clearly on the can, and unless you meant it that way (can't tell since you didn't tell us anything) I'll assume it wasn't intentional (cause I can't thing of a good reason, though it's possible), and say that if you're doing portrait work in a 'studio' don't stick to using central focal point unless you can focus lock and recompose.

The lighting feels a bit harsh and the colors just seem off. Care to tell us what you did in PP?
All in all, to me, it's a good first step but has a while to go, particularly in the lighting. I'd make the lighting softer, ie bigger light source or get it closer to her. I can tell from the one with glasses you put your softbox too far away, that's why you got such harsh hard shadows. The point of a softbox is to make the light soft by getting it close to her. That's why all the lighting in your shots is too harsh fyi.
Keep shooting, look into lighting (either reading Light: Science and Magic) or checking out Strobist.com.

Good luck

[Rhiannon Robins]

I think the focus on the can is maybe the best part of the photo. Also, her skin looks a bit purple, the white balance may be off.