against the wall

[gunners67]

Hi looking for some critique on this pic.
I would like to know if you think this looks a bit flat and lacking in something. so what can i do to make it stand out a bit more all comments most welcome ta!



Exposure 0.25 sec (1/4)
Aperture f/11.0
Focal Length 20 mm
ISO Speed 100
Exposure Bias 0 EV
Flash Off, Did not fire

[SusanH1970]

It is a bit flat, but what stands out to me the most is that from using a wide angle, her feet and lower legs look unnaturally huge in the foreground. I'd have also had her look at the camera - there's no connection and it leaves me wondering what she's staring off at.

[bikingbadger]

The first thing that pop's out is the bottle of coke that completely doesn't seem to fit in the photo. Susan mentions having here look at the camera, I would offer another suggestion in having here lean her head against the wall. The only other thing I'd add that is if this was a set up shot then maybe a more colourful beany and scarve would have brought out some more vibrancy although by looking at the photo it seems like it is overcast so maybe another direction is needed.

[gunners67]

Originally Posted by SusanH1970

It is a bit flat, but what stands out to me the most is that from using a wide angle, her feet and lower legs look unnaturally huge in the foreground. I'd have also had her look at the camera - there's no connection and it leaves me wondering what she's staring off at.

Thanks susan H actually my wife has really big feet ( just kidding )
Your right of course i was a little to close and wide.

[Nicole Hanna]

The coke bottle is really the only distracting thing to me. It seems a bit flat, but only because there's no punch of color or interest in hue or saturation. I don't mind that she's not addressing the camera. Looking off camera encourages the formation of viewer "stories". I don't need to know what she's looking at, because I can fill in those blanks with my own theories. Nice crisp contemplative capture.

[gunners67]

Originally Posted by bikingbadger

The first thing that pop's out is the bottle of coke that completely doesn't seem to fit in the photo. Susan mentions having here look at the camera, I would offer another suggestion in having here lean her head against the wall. The only other thing I'd add that is if this was a set up shot then maybe a more colourful beany and scarve would have brought out some more vibrancy although by looking at the photo it seems like it is overcast so maybe another direction is needed.

I agree i think a little brighter colour would have helped these are a bit muted.
Actually the coke bottle was deliberate as i am doing a city & guilds course and my end of term breif is 10 portait pics with a theme so mine is coke. Although struggling a little with ideas at the moment