Light & flash

[abhasbajpai]

I was just playing with rear curtain sync flash and light with my daughter as a model when i took this, for post processing, i have adjusted levels and curves. I liked the surreal and mystic appeal in this shot, like the blanket of light wrapping her.....



please do tell me what you think about this

1 sec, f5, 117 mm, iso 400.
d60 with sigma 70-300 APO macro

[abhasbajpai]

94 views and no comments ?
please do tell me what do you think about the shot ..

[BigVinnie]

I know your looking for feedback so I will jump in.

My problem is that I don't know exactly what you are going for with these. You have two paths you can take, one is to photograph her, the other is abstract. If this were film I would have thought the film was heat damaged. That is the type of randomness I see here.

If the subject were something other than a child I think you could do more. Unfortunately I don't have any great insight here. Just that it might work if it were more abstract.

[abhasbajpai]

its portrait with abstract kinda like Jan Roald one, only thing thing light replaced other eliments.
randomness is the main element in the photograph
now if the film would have been heat damanged upon processing it would turn orange not natural color light, i do have these kind of images on film, i will scan and upload them.

[Niresangwa]

I guess a place to start would be to ask a specific question. It may garner more comments, aside from the fact that it's a posting rule for the critique section.

In terms of guessing a question and answering it, it doesn't reach a level of surreal or mystical for me.

The light is a good component, if a little too heavy (it dominates the image rather than accentuates an aspect) and the child is a good component (though not doing anything interesting, and not looking at the camera or interacting with an object).

You lose the ethereal feel completely with that wallpaper/curtain pattern and also the shirt the child is wearing. Both are too busy and detailed. The neutral colours of the background and the screaming pink do not complement either each other nor the image in general. Were this done in a high or low key, or a much shallower DoF you may have more success. The inability to convert to B&W which would normally be a way out of this issue with this image isn't available to you given you need the colour of the light to make it effective.

In short, it looks like it's exactly what you said it was: you were playing around with techniques and this fell out of your camera. Apply the technique in a more suitable setting, and put this one down to experience.