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Old 06-02-2010, 02:40 AM
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I took this photo in my apartment. There is absolutely no natural light in this image. It is a single 150watt bulb.
I shot it saturated and added highlights to her eyes.

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Old 06-02-2010, 03:27 AM
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I think its gorgeous. I'm sure some will say it needs a little fill, but i like the stark contrast. personally I may not have chopped off the top of her head, but it works. one of the better shots i've seen in here for critique. focus appears (from this small image) to be where it needs to be. Overall, very nice, thanks for posting.

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Old 06-02-2010, 10:56 AM
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There is nothing I can really critique about this. I pretty much like everything about it.
I really enjoy the mood of this photograph. It is a little on the dark side(mood wise), which I like. I suppose it is just my state of mind at the moment.
About the only thing I would pick on about this, would be the transition in to the shadow. About mid way through the transition looks a little too brown. Almost like the burn tool was overused, or a layer was changed to overlay, and the opacity wasn't adjusted down. If you know what I mean?
Otherwise, I think it looks great, and would be very pleased with it!
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Old 06-02-2010, 12:49 PM
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I agree with Luke regarding the transition. Very nice photograph.
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Old 06-02-2010, 09:28 PM
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the pose, the gaze, and the color tones are nice and work well for this image. Nice pic.
After closer examination +1 to RLucas comment about the shadow transition.
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I like how you add highlight into her eye, superb photo
in my personal opinion, if you can include a bit more of her head, it may be better portrait
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Old 06-03-2010, 09:17 AM
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Unbelievable! Just one bulb?
The highlights in the eyes is the icing on the cake!
Great shooting!
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Old 06-03-2010, 02:44 PM
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I think that if you would have moved the light a bit higher the shadows would be more pleasing. She's just a bit too under-lit for my taste. On one side of her nose there is a shadow that sort of has a triangle shape; for me this is distracting. Also the shadows are pretty dark, maybe bounce some light with a white card just to soften them so that you have a little bit of detail in the shadows. I love the pose and composition. Beautiful model as well!!! Nice job!
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