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[Eruditass]

Submitted for a contest a while ago under the theme of a 2-photo narrative. What do you think about the story that it tells? How can it be enhanced? Should the color contrast between the two be amplified? What about the composition and idea?

For some reason this resize looks much less sharp than even 1:1, even with sharpening applied.

Camera Maker: PENTAX
Camera Model: PENTAX K-x
Lens: smc PENTAX-FA 100-300mm F4.7-5.8
Image Date: 2011-01-16 20:44:25 -0500
Focal Length: 155.0mm (35mm equivalent: 232mm)
Aperture: f/9.0
Exposure Time: 1.000 s
ISO equiv: 100
Exposure Bias: none
Metering Mode: Center Weight
Exposure: Manual
Exposure Mode: Manual
White Balance: Auto


Camera Maker: PENTAX
Camera Model: PENTAX K-x
Lens: smc PENTAX-FA 100-300mm F4.7-5.8
Image Date: 2011-01-16 20:41:28 -0500
Focal Length: 118.0mm (35mm equivalent: 177mm)
Aperture: f/9.0
Exposure Time: 0.400 s (1/3)
ISO equiv: 200
Exposure Bias: none
Metering Mode: Center Weight
Exposure: Manual
Exposure Mode: Manual
White Balance: Auto

[BigFuzzy]

Originally Posted by Eruditass

Submitted for a contest a while ago under the theme of a 2-photo narrative. What do you think about the story that it tells? How can it be enhanced? Should the color contrast between the two be amplified? What about the composition and idea?

For some reason this resize looks much less sharp than even 1:1, even with sharpening applied.

To be honest, I don't see much of a story other than two people at/near some rocks at sunset. Or, these people were photographed at sunset. It's probably me as my mind is more analytical than artsy at times, but I really don't see a story here, sorry.

As for your photos themselves, they are waaay over sharpened or overprocessed in some way. The reason I say this is the "halo" around the border between the rock/people and the sky. Whatever you did was way over done if it has created halos.
Don't get me wrong, they're quite nice images in general, but just wanted to share my perspective.

[Corey Thompson]

I don't see much of a story either, but I too am a very analytical person. If the couple were cuddling on a cliff in front of a sunset, that would tell more of a story for me; that the couple is in love and is sharing a magical moment together.

[Eruditass]

Originally Posted by BigFuzzy

To be honest, I don't see much of a story other than two people at/near some rocks at sunset. Or, these people were photographed at sunset. It's probably me as my mind is more analytical than artsy at times, but I really don't see a story here, sorry.

You'd better be sorry!

But really, it helps to know that the story in my mind is not always seen by others. I may keep them as two separate photos if the link isn't strong enough.

As for your photos themselves, they are waaay over sharpened or overprocessed in some way. The reason I say this is the "halo" around the border between the rock/people and the sky. Whatever you did was way over done if it has created halos.
Don't get me wrong, they're quite nice images in general, but just wanted to share my perspective.

Yeah, I couldn't get it looking quite right at low resolution. With higher resolutions, it just looks so much sharper (with no noticeable haloing). In the end I just gave up and left it like this for the small version as I needed to get some sleep

[Eruditass]

Originally Posted by Corey Thompson

I don't see much of a story either, but I too am a very analytical person. If the couple were cuddling on a cliff in front of a sunset, that would tell more of a story for me; that the couple is in love and is sharing a magical moment together.

While at first I wanted to yell out to them to cuddle and embrace each other. In the end, I think it would've made a stronger message, yet almost conforming to a cliche.

The message I intended was simply a relationship in the first frame. Warm, close, and intimate. But not necessarily perfect. The second frame is after the relationship ends, and he comes back to what is now revealed as a cliff to look off to the world. The second frame is meant to be colder, and less intimate, portrayed through a zoom out and cooler color temperature.

Of course, a photo should never be words to display its message, so that's something I need to work on.

[autofocus]

well, to be honest, I thought one of them might have jumped to their ending while the other suffers the loss