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Old 07-03-2007, 06:22 PM
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Like I have told others, what are you trying to say with the shot?
I like the shot and leading the eye to the other side but I feel lost in trying to determine what is happening... what is the story? What is the subject? The tee or the cart or the journey?
If there was someone at the tee and the cart was on the path to it, I would know what is happening. "The Journey to the Hole" it could be called.

The colors are nice. Good exposure. I would like to see more cart.. move over to the left to have more cart and less grass on the right of the shot.
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Old 07-03-2007, 07:09 PM
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Good job, photo showed up, and it's pretty good. Given the nature of golf courses, I'm not sure if it's horizontally level. The two vertical poles in the distance seem OK, though. Wonder if your story, as Avv604 has discussed, could be seen from opposite side of green better, showing approaching golfers? This way seems to have a narrow access for a wide photograph.
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FastGlass, Welcome

Good job, photo showed up, and it's pretty good. Given the nature of golf courses, I'm not sure if it's horizontally level. The two vertical poles in the distance seem OK, though. Wonder if your story, as Avv604 has discussed, could be seen from opposite side of green better, showing approaching golfers? This way seems to have a narrow access for a wide photograph.
yea yea, if the road was on the right more... and showing golfers approaching then you might see the emotion on the faces. Like this is the last hole, it has been a rough course but I have fought the fight and won. I will win against this hole as well.

Now that would be a great shot. To portray that emotion and story... mmmm... nice.
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I assume the are to the right is the tee off for the hole, with a wider lens it might be possible to find a viewpoint showing a tee off, a couple players waiting on the trail, the latter leading into the scene.

As it stands, technically this is a good shot, but the slice of golf cart really takes away from the scene. I play alot of golf and carry my clubs. The healthy people who whip around in those carts aren't my favourite people on the course.
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I like the idea, I think I'd crop it a bit...golfhole.jpg
I live on a golf course so I'm always looking for a "new perspective." This is my version of our signature hole:Number17orb.jpg
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I agree with odark30's suggestion of cropping. The cart is not in the frame enough to make it part of the image. It becomes a distraction because of that. But I got to say that you captured the rest of the scene quite well.
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I agree with the cropping, but with cart out it hard to tell what your main idea was.
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