Can some one tell me why I don't like these spreads...PART 3

[sagelike31]

Here is Part 1 and Part 2

I'm straying away from doing what I did last time in terms of focusing on the arrangement of the photos and focusing on just the arrangement of the actual piece.
I figured I take baby steps.


I like the way this turned out but I figured that I could do more. Maybe add more to the frame or more to the text. But my overall focus was to keep it simple.

So shoot away guys. Thanks in advance.

[Megatrond]

If the picture were black and white with more powerful contrast, you would have an amazing package.

[Saralonde]

I think the frame and title are overwhelming the picture. The first thing I noticed was the title and the frame. The subject of your shot became secondary.

[photonoob]

Originally Posted by Saralonde

I think the frame and title are overwhelming the picture. The first thing I noticed was the title and the frame. The subject of your shot became secondary.

I'll go along with Saralonde on that. It's a great photo, but it's getting lost in all the framing; the title's drawing the eye straight past the pic and onto itself.

Personally, I'd go black and white for the photo, and keep the framing to an absolute minimum - the lines in your picture are strong enough to not want adornment.

[alissasanderson]

I think this is a wonderful photo. I've never considered shooting the back of a statue, but it works very well.

I agree with the previous posters concerning the framing--it's a little strong. If you're going to go with the greenish cast to the photo, I might also think about a colored frame--black, perhaps, with white text? And, of course, a little thinner. The white seems rather stark. In B&W this would really pop in the white frame.

[Englishteacher]

Ditto to the above ... and I think the photo itself is a bit cramped. Maybe a bit of additional "white space". It is difficult to understand the idea of the statue when it is too tightly cropped. I also don't care for the green, but then I'm a naturalist. I like things the way they are unless everything is totally out of sync. Then I will use PhotoShop.

[jiminyClickit]

sagelike31,



In Part 4, "Can some one tell me how I might improve on this?" you could change the tone of your critiques some. At first read of title, I know you don't like something, so I'm tempted to find as many "off" things as I can.

In five minutes, leaving most of your original concept, only a little of the green intensity was dropped, and I went where you said you wanted to go - simple. Simple is generally "less." I could have gone to b/w and even a simpler font; this is a step towards that. It's always going to be your vision, so this is one "baby step" towards figuring out how to show that vision in the best possible light.

[Englishteacher]

much nicer!

[sana]

Yes, nicer.... but deja vu - too many times. I actually like the rigid framing, it goes with the message. Black and white contrast as well. I like the font of the title, it's just a little too close to the edge below. Green is a good choise, I think. Yet, it does follow some old pattern of design, and everything is centered which seem too much, maybe. I would do something to break it. I'd maybe try to make a statue much smaller (to fill 1/4 of the frame), put it in the down right corner, and leave lots of empty green space above it and on the left.
I'm not really into design, so don't take me too seriously.