Picture: "Already Out" Critique

[jaggedaz]

I thought this was a cool photo, but the people I've showed it to didn't realize at first that the background is a reflection from a window. How can I make it more obvious? Should I just leave it? Comments on the photo overall?

[clockdoc]

Welcome to the group. I see what you are talking about but IMHO the background tends to distract more than help whether it is a reflection or not. I like the lighting, expression and tonal qualities of the subject very much. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

[mikem12188]

I have to agree with clockdoc on this one. Without reading your description my first thought was to chop off the top. You might have a good little portrait here with some judicious cropping.

[jaggedaz]

Thanks for the advice guys. I really wanted to tell a story with this pic, but it's just not obvious what's going on around her. She was first one out during a water balloon fight and I thought it was interesting that you could still see the other kids playing, but there's just no visual clues as to the rest of the scene.

Thanks again!

[wulf]

Sometimes you have to present other pictures alongside so that the combined series tells the story. The idea is neat but the reflections don't show anything more than a couple of people.

Also, if she was first out, how comes she is not soaking wet?

Wulf