Saxamuphone

[magnus9]

I was trying to get that extreme DOF and I liked the way it turned out. I would really appreciate some comments on this one.

[Palachandra]

magnus9,

I feel the blur effect at the bottom of the frame distracting my attention.

[jiminyClickit]

magnus9,

Homer says, "D'oh!" An angle would bring interest, less DoF would bring out the kind of instrument photographed, and color would just warm things up.

[wulf]

I don't mind the black and white effect and I love the liquidity of the shiny metal. However, I agree with Palachandra about the blurred bell of the instrument being distracting and also Jiminy's suggestion about putting the instrument on more of an angle.

I would want to keep the narrow DoF though - it looks great as it transforms from sharp focus to smooth bokeh at the top of the picture.

Wulf

[ELAY]

I'm with Wulf.

The bottom right is a problem for me, and prevents me from understanding what is going on. I wondered if it was the bell, or even some other object protruding. If you could find an angle that cuts that part out you have a nice photograph.

When I put my hand over the bottom 1/2 or so of the shot (low-tech cropping) the picture is much stronger and makes much more sense. (I wouldn't suggest you crop this particular shot though, because I think a long vertical would suit the composition.)

EL

[wulf]

Hands over the picture may be low tech but it is a great way to quickly help visualise the effect of different crops. Just try not to rub your grubby hands all over the screen!



Wulf

[jdepould]

Simple repositioning would probably do the trick, lay the horn down so it's a little more horizontal, so the bell is in the same plane as everything else. Going diagonallly through the frame is also something worth experimenting with.

[magnus9]

How's this? I angled it and cut out most of the bell though I really like the wau it looks in B&W so I kept that.

[jdepould]

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[magnus9]

It's showing up on my screen...