Old Lady

[XpLoiT]

Old Lady by beach by ~xploit on deviantART

Hope this works!

unfortunate of the size i have resized it a little small i think

[clockdoc]

Hi,
Yes, it is a little small. I had a look at the larger version at the link. I like the texture of the skin on her hand and face. You may want to play with the cropping by removing the part of the person to the left and some of the dark, heavy space to the right. You could even try a vertical cropping. Evaluate how the light areas of the background come through when you crop. If they are distracting then tone them down to better blend with the background. Your eye wants to go to the lighter part of the image and will bypass the subject. The shadow on her face is pretty heavy but because of the pose it works well with the overall mood of the image. Without the great skin tone/texture, the pose would not be as effective. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

[jiminyClickit]

XpLoiT,

If you are most struck with hand, maybe featuring that would create more interest. You could still lead in with rail, just not so much of it. As clockdoc suggests, left person can go and I believe much of right side. And bottom.

[XpLoiT]

thanks guys! all c&C taken on board and i will play around with it. i also may re-do this in a larger version and see if it gives a little more!

thanks!

[XpLoiT]

updated shot

Old Lady v2 by ~xploit on deviantART

[Saralonde]

Much improved with the crop. I can still see a little of the other man at the top of her head, but it is not so distracting as before.

[tufcat]

Good crop. It's a small adjustment, but it has made a huge difference in the presentation. Nice job, good advice.

[clockdoc]

Thanks for reworking it. I feel you have a much stronger portrait in this composition. Great subject!

[XpLoiT]

thanks very much guys for ur help i much prefer the 2nd shot too.

[XpLoiT]

Originally Posted by Saralonde

Much improved with the crop. I can still see a little of the other man at the top of her head, but it is not so distracting as before.

sarah i did try and remove his head from the back but it got really top heavy (well i found it it) so i decided to leave it in just a little. feel free to edit and repost if ud like im more than hapy for ppl to retouch for c&C purposes