FocalFrenzy,
EDIT: I didn't see the portion where you said without editing. Sorry about that. I will still leave my response....Thanks
To me the background is to distracting. I would have tried an aperture that would have put the background a little more out of focus. This is my quick 5 min edit.
Remember this is quick edit. It could be much better, I am just trying to show how a more out of focus background would draw more attention to the picture.