Thanks for your response.
Here is a link to the images:
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#25 is the one with "fuschia" lips and #33 is the one that she can "see pixels" in.
Keep in mind that I am literally brand new. I am still learning about flash, white balance, shooting in RAW, and post processing. My fees reflect that and I think I am very reasonable. I clearly explain to my clients that I am building my portfolio and I am still learning.
I do appreciate constructive criticism. Thank you!